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Original Poems
Started by realeyes at 07-27-2008 7:18 AM. Topic has 5 replies.
  
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 07-27-2008, 7:18 AM
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realeyes
 
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this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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This just isn't for me
the way that i live
the way that i feel
i have nothing to give
you mean nothing to me
this is so hard to say
i couldn't stand to be with you
for one more day
so i'll write a letter
and tell everyone why
you have to go
you have to die
this isn't about you
i swear that it's me
you've done all that you can
it's just not meant to be
i know what they'll say
how selfish i am
but they don't get it
they just don't understand
i tried to be happy
to have a smile on my face
but not this time
and not this place
i'll miss you a little
but not enough to stay
i couldn't look in this mirror
for one more day
everyone is crying
but i feel so right
i'm so happy that
i decided to do this tonight
even though i'm gone
you'll call me back again
and maybe later
we'll be better friends.
**gold star to anyone who can guess correctly on the first try!**
and i don't remember how to make the stanzas distinct so bear with me
"to be a virgin is to know yourself
www.myspace.com/tocoolforskool
 p.s i am the one on the right!
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08-20-2008, 6:10 AM
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Jerseyzgifted
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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Okay....I liked this alot but the vibe I'm kinda getting from this write is suicide. Is that right? I maybe wrong but the reason I guess I keep getting that vibe is because my friend's brother just killed himself last week so...that could be just the vibe I'm on. Well, an any case I really like this write. Let me know what you were really saying if I was wrong. Keep up the good work!!!
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09-24-2008, 2:54 PM
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realeyes
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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yeah it is about suicide...all the people i read this too assume it's about a person...but good for you! and sorry to hear about your friends brother =(
"to be a virgin is to know yourself
www.myspace.com/tocoolforskool
p.s i am the one on the right!
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09-29-2008, 3:33 AM
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Jerseyzgifted
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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WOW!!! I thought I was just reading too much into it. What made you write this piece?....if you don't mind me asking. I'm just wondering because besides my friend's brother I went through something personally myself. This is a very good write.....
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09-29-2008, 3:41 AM
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Jerseyzgifted
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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Okay wait, I just have one more question.....When you say, "....this isn't about you" are you talking about "Life"? I know you said most people think you are talking about a person.....just trying to get a full understanding of this.
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10-30-2008, 7:48 PM
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realeyes
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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when i say ..."this isn't about you i swear that it's me" i am talking about life...i am saying goodbye to life...what made me write this is over the past year i became really depressed that is how i released it
"to be a virgin is to know yourself
www.myspace.com/tocoolforskool
p.s i am the one on the right!
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