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Original Poems
Started by poetryflow at 07-28-2008 9:29 PM. Topic has 2 replies.
 
 
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07-28-2008, 9:29 PM
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poetryflow

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As we lay.. Staring at the ceiling.. Counting the cracks.. She laughed.. What's so funny?.. I ask.. She said thinking about my past.. So many things I couldn't grasp Hid the true me behind a mask.. So many times my heart was in a cast.. Then in a flash.. You cleared the foggy glass.. I looked out the window and saw you Standing in greener grass Your all I think about .. the first and the last.. Letters together to form words, Adjectives, and verbs, Can't describe the feeling.. Your love calms my nerves.. Sometimes I feel like I don't deserve.. Thank-you.. For changing my World
Amazin', Your love keeps me dazin'.. I can write about you for days ~ n ~ days ~ n ~days ~ n ~ days ~ n ~..
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07-29-2008, 6:59 PM
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asIam

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Feels like i was in the room at the very moment this took place, you write with lovely imagery, the realistic kind. And as ususal the flow is always smooth. Nice. Peace and blessings.
To be sure, an ordinary passerby would think that my rose looked just like you--the rose that belongs to me. But in herself alone she is more important than all the hundreds of you other roses: because it is she that I have watered.
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07-29-2008, 9:55 PM
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poetryflow

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Thank you asIam, I'm glad you liked it..
Amazin', Your love keeps me dazin'.. I can write about you for days ~ n ~ days ~ n ~days ~ n ~ days ~ n ~..
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